时间:2021-12-21 457 16人参与
毕业于毕业于四川外国语大学,进修于美国威廉玛丽学院,拥有7年雅思口语/听力,托福口语科目教学经验,7年出国语言课程培训经验;雅思总分8分;剑桥大学英语教师资格证(CELTA)及TKT;英语专业八级;BEC商务英语高级学员出分率99.7%,学生好评分4.96分(满分5分)
很多同学的托福口语成绩会有一个瓶颈期的阶段,无论怎么练习,口语成绩总是卡在18-23分之间。今天就来为大家解决一下这个问题。
中国大陆考生在托福口语考试中可能出现的失误:
1. 把握不好语速;
2. 逻辑跳跃,表达不清楚自己的意思;
3. 以为句子结构月复杂,得分越高。
举例:
托福独立考试题目:
Some people exercise outside or go to the gym each day, while others do so when they have free time. Which do you think is better?
(2021年12月11日)
想必大多数人的第一个想法肯定是同意!!!!!!
接下来就是这种回答了
I believe that people should go to the gym each day. Because it is good for their health.
They can do some exercise in the gym. They won’t get sick easily. And it only takes them few hours to finish. If they don’t go to the gym, they may back home to play phone.
Second, they can make friends in the gym. It is very good for them. They won’t feel lonely. Friends are important during our life. It is hard to imagine that, we can have a wonderful life without a friend. So I think it is necessary to go to the gym every day.
如果单个句子去理解几乎没啥问题,表达也比较清楚,作为母语是中文的我们能够顺畅理解。
但是致命的问题是每个点都是提一嘴,而并没有细节去展开,并且思维上有些跳跃,过渡不自然,以至于最终有点像是在讲道理,而不是用事实在论证自己的观点。
那么如何在不改变大致意思的前提下进行适当的改述让一个可能在18分附近的答案达到25+呢?
我们一起来修改一下:
首先对第一句话进行适当地改述:It’s a no brainer, I prefer to go to the gym every day. 当然原文的第一句也可以。
接下来标明了观点 good for their health。问题就来了,原文还是在停留在问题标题提供的exercise层面进行了复述,这是无效答案。
所以我们需要加facts or details, 比如 there are lots of fitness facilities that i can use to keep fit.
紧接着下一句原文提到他们不会get sick,这个逻辑是跳跃的,(去健身为什么就不会get sick)所以需要之前解释一下为什么不会得病,加上这么一句:Training in the gym is beneficial to my immune system which will reduce the chance of getting sick.
接下来思路跳跃到了每次健身只需要few hours,并不能强有力的站得住脚。
I don’t need to worry about my health anymore. 后面部分再讲玩手机的时间用来锻炼,因此可以写成:instead of playing with my phone after work,i Will spend at least 1 hour on my training。
后面一个观点涉及到了交朋友万能理由。如果要改述就要变成:second,it is highly possible that I can make friends with someone who also like to come to the gym. 接下来应该要解释怎么交的朋友,或者是健身期间都做了什么。
Sharing the keeping-fit experiences and feelings about our past during the training is also a good way to know each other well. As a high school student I don’t have other opportunity to get to know others outside of the school. So the gym is my only place which gives me chance to make friends.
那么完整的答案内容如下:
It’s a no brainer, I prefer to go to the gym every day, instead of playing on my phone after work, I will spend at least 1 hour on my training. There are lots of fitness facilities that i can use to keep fit。Training in the gym is beneficial to my immune system which will reduce the chance of getting sick. I don’t need to worry about my health anymore.
Second,it is highly possible that I can make friends with someone who also like to come to the gym. Sharing the keeping-fit experiences and feelings about our past during the training is also a good way to know each other well. As a high school student, I don’t have other opportunities to get to know others outside of the school, since I have too much assignment to do. So the gym is the only place which gives me chance to make friends.
可以看出我们将原来18左右的分数答案按照内容和逻辑进行优化,如果连贯性正常,那么这个语料就可以被用来冲刺25分。
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